35. The following appeared as part of a recommendation from the financial planning office to the administration of Fern Valley University.
In the past few years, Fern Valley University has suffered from a decline in both enrollments and admissions applications. The reason can be discovered from our students, who most often cite poor teaching and inadequate2 library resources as their chief sources of dissatisfaction with Fern Valley. Therefore, in order to increase the number of students attending our university, and hence to regain3 our position as the most prestigious4 university in the greater Fern Valley metropolitan5 area, it is necessary to initiate6 a fund-raising campaign among the alumni that will enable us to expand the range of subjects we teach and to increase the size of our library facilities.
Discuss how well reasoned... etc.
财政计划办公室给Fem Valley大学的建议书：
在过去的几年里，Fem Valley大学经受了入学人数和入学申请的双重降低。缘由可以从大家的学生那里找到，他们常常将低劣的教学和不适合的图书馆资源作为他们对学校的主要不满之处。因此，为了提升想加入大家学校的学生数，从而重新获得大家在大Fem Valley区域的最有声望的大学的地位，在校友中发动一个基金募集计划使大家能扩展教学科目改变图书馆的设施是十分必要的。
1， 增加教学科目和图书馆的型号并未必就能使学生变得认可由于他们可能并非对教学和图书馆的这两个方面感到不满
2， 入学人数和入学申请的降低可能是由于整个外部环境致使的而不是学校我们的问题
3， 没提供学生对教学水平和图书馆不认可的具体证据.
4， 调查的本身就值得怀疑.
ability attract customer merit alleviate7 inadequate unfavorable economical conditions hearsay8 rumour9 scant10 anecdotal evidence
The financial-planning office at Fern Valley University concludes that it is necessary to initiate a fund-raising campaign among alumni that will enable the university to expand the range of subjects it offers and increase the size of its library facilities. Its argument is based on a five-year decline in enrollments and admission applications together with the claim that students cite poor teaching and inadequate library resources as their chief sources of dissatisfaction with Fern Valley. The conclusion of the financial-planning office is not strongly supported by the reasons given.
To begin with, this argument depends on the assumption that providing a greater range of subjects and a larger library will alleviate the students chief sources of dissatisfaction. However, the students have not complained about inadequate course offerings or about the size of the library; their complaint is that the existing courses are poorly taught and that library resources are inadequate. Offering more kinds of classes does not improve teaching quality, and increasing a librarys size does nothing to enhance its holdings, or resources. Accordingly, the recommendation does not bear directly on the problem as stated.
Secondly11, the proposal unfairly assumes that the recent enrollment1 and application decline was caused by poor teaching and inadequate library resources. It is equally possible that all colleges, regardless of teaching quality and library resources, have experienced similar declines. These declines may have been due to unrelated factors, such as unfavorable economic conditions, or an increase in high-paying computer jobs not requiring a college education.
Thirdly, the author provides no support for the claim that students are dissatisfied with the teaching and library resources at Fern Valley. It is possible that the claim is based on hearsay or on scant anecdotal evidence. Without more information about the basis of the claim, we cannot be sure that the financial-planning office is addressing the real problems.
In conclusion, the advice of the financial planning office is not well supported. To strengthen the argument, the planning office must provide evidence that students are dissatisfied with the range of subjects and with the librarys size, and that this dissatisfaction is the cause of the recent decline in enrollment and the number of admission applications. To better assess the argument as it stands, we would need to know whether the students attitudes were measured in a reliable, scientific manner.
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